WOOOOOOOOOOOOOOW
this is amazing amazing amazing
i love the story and the flow
this was gr8 piece except for some small mistakes
"Dead of the night"
if u mean dead people in the night
u have to add The before Dead cause dead alone give the meaning of verb here

"I was...
Freeze in myself"

freeze should be frozen or freezing grammar again xD

I like how u talked about the gifted people
the sixth sense and so

and u gave gr8 description for it too xD

5/5 this is one of your best in my opinion
keep writing =)

More than i enjoyed your poems
i this very scary

Well that was chiling and dark but defnitely a good piece of poetryy you have come up with this... and I like how you explained it at the end, its quite interesting actually. . but anyway nicely written piece keep writing alright. .

5/5

Wow..well, from wh@ u've just taught, I still can agree to d quote d@> all fingers are not equal..& Yes! u made d difference very clear from your wright.. Keep up d good work pls.. Thumbs up!

"Dread of the night"
---'dread' should be 'dead'. "In the dead of the night" is an idiomatic expression for midnight.
"Ebony gulped the sky"
---'gulped' to me didn't create the desirable image, perhaps 'swallowed'?
I like the use of 'begrimed' in the next line. Nicely done..
"Thought floated me
To succubus of motley"
---'thought' I suggest should be 'thoughts'.. Hmm.. I read about succubus before, it's a mythical creature or something, and I remember reading 'motley' from one of Poe's short stories with the wine, I forgot the title and I'm too lazy to search it. But if I remember correctly, it's a clothing. So I don't understand how you tied this both...
There are some gems scattered in this piece and there are lines which just don't make sense (at least to me, so feel free to PM me perhaps and rid me of my ignorance). Such as:
"Qualm the blared of clock
Shuddered in every tic-tac"
--- 'qualm' was awkwardly placed here. And I don't understand it at all.
"Suspired my aghast breath
Antipasto like a sublime death..."
---suspired is sighed, I think. I know antipasto, I'm part Italian (lol), it's like an appetizer or something, and I don't get the use of it here.
"Bugaboo was born
Pulse jumped so fast
Heart in holocaust..."
---what's a bugaboo?
However, as I've said, there are some gems here such as:
"Oh, their faces worn in shadow
No eyes, nose and lips can I saw
Merely heard their dreadful silence
Grave, pale sound rising"
---what imagery! so beautiful. Just change 'saw' to see.
It needs more work grammar-wise, and some misplaced and awkwardly used words kind of puts off this piece. I advice you to be simpler, use words you understand. And maybe add just one or two 'fancy' words. Yes, you have potential and REALLY amazing ideas, and I'd love to do a collab soon (hehe), but right now use simple words.
-X
PS I'm fond of the sixth sense message and stuff here, as I've said, you have amazing ideas. Keep it up :)

Whoa! Nice one here. You really went serious on the dark theme huh? Im truly impressed with the way you made this poem, as if you really put some major thought, as in major thought, lol. I really enjoyed this, eh, the same way I enjoyed all your poems.

Wow this was dark. it was crazy but thats what makes it a great read and very unique :) definetaly a 5 on this one

AMAZING, WOW, I LOVE IT

It is amazingly written...!!!
It has a visual touch to it...!I can feel every bit of your poem and it did feared me out...!
the flow is just awesome...I was clinged to read it to the end...!!!
Well written..!
Good work my friend:)

Its really a different kind of poem than i have usually heard..........its nice ..and beautifully written..words u have used are very unique to me..might be because i dont know english much..
Xanthe have suggested u well enough,ya?i honestly can't analyse and suggest like her..because i of course dont have much of the knowledge about english writing n poems n all..

Looking forward to more of your poems!!
*_*

This inspired me :)

What a explination.. Excellent choice of words...
Hats off.. :)

Very interesting poem... I hope this premonition never came to past though. I could only imagine what it would be like to walk upon a scene of that sort.