Comments : Beneath These Broken Wings

  • 11 years ago

    by Dagmar Wilson

    Well written piece, very meaningful

  • 11 years ago

    by Britt

    Judgement should be judgment :)

    I'm a little confused by the poem and didn't keep up throughout the entire contest. I love the sadness and the imagery here. Your third stanza (it's long so I won't copy it) is definitely my favorite. You have a lot of ideas from your other poems incorporated into one :)

  • 11 years ago

    by Nema

    Luu, your poems are just as beautiful as I left them, even more now =)
    The only thing I noticed was the too many 'and's.
    Wonderful work!

  • 11 years ago

    by Yrem Crish

    This is a very meaningful piece. The rhythm and the scheme are precisely fitted in the whole story. The spectrum of thoughts depicts the sanity of poem. It is very impressive:)
    One of my fav poem",