I enjoyed reading this, it was quite different. different format of writing that I have not come upon yet. i loved how you talked of the stars and mentioned you pulled each one from the sky, those lines stay in my mind. you have talent as a writer from what i have read, do think about that as well as poetry! keep writing please!! 5/5

Ash

Something in this poem reads intriguing, inscrutable flawlessness... I love it.

This is brilliant.

So many clever word plays and words well versed. It's also heart breaking yet sweet.

I pull out a jar of them, four hundred
and thirty full. "How simple it would be
to drown them in all that coffee. Imagine
how easily you could tear the stars
to shreds."

^^This is my favorite part. It shows a lot of vulnerability in a way, from you and her.

I feel like I'm not full grasping everything within it but what I am is amazing, it seems so deep and what I'm getting is only from the surface. It's lovely though.