What do I see? Well Kelwin, I see someone who is looking for someone to notice that he is in pain. Most people don't notice because they are always thinking about themselves and their lives. This is what happened to you most likely. I hope that someday you find someone who notices you, and who will help you get over your pain.

Good job at expressing your emotions in this poem. The reader can sense despair in your words. You also gave a good impression of how looks can be so deceiving. Great job.

Good poem
4/5

Dear Kelwin, your poem reflects your profile, it is a good poem. I have been there too! I remember wishing to have physical pain in place of the pain of my depression. In my despair I cried out to God, he heard me and delivered me from my sin and pain. I have prayed for you that the Lord will do the same for you! Most of my poems honor Jesus, I think you would like; "Just an ordinary day" Ken

Kelwin, I have dedicated my latest poem; Have faith in God, to you and J3ssia (Jess) and all who suffer today.

Ken