Great form and nice flow. very well written! :)

Oh wow! Steven i really love this piece, dark, mean, moody and fantastic!

Ive never seen this type of poem before, i cant wait to play with this form!!!

I really love what you did with the form. It works well with your subject and the words you chose to take the reader through the murder of your love and the destruction of your heart. Well done.

This is a tought format, Steven, but you nailed it.

It read like a short story of a man who had had enough, it gave me goose bumps.

Well thought out, good job:)

5/5 Ingrid

Wow, Stephen, you did it
I love the format, I can see the dark coming out
excellent

I agree, this is an excellent piece. I can see the darkness and the pain coming out of it. From what I understand, it seems that someone ripped your heart out and then destroyed it.

Excellent
5/5

Ohhhhh I love this form, its new to me. You did it justice with this dark emotional piece. I specially liked the progression of it, from crying to dieing and eventually a goodbye. Flowed so perfectly ..

I will give this form a try I guess :P

You know this could also be taken in another way as murder of trust and everything along with it dies as well..at least that is how I see it too..maybe I am wrong. Nonetheless you have done well with this form and brought out your message clear...excellent!