BLOODY BUTTERFLY

I have to admit that after I read this I was a little creeped out. I have recently found out that I can't even kill a worm :[ so what do you think happens when I think of a butterfly being tortured? Nothing good I can assure you.

Anyway...the imagery you put into this poem is great. I can imagine almost everything that it says.

The rhyming was also good, but I can tell that you were struggling for words that rhymed together, or maybe you just didn't care after a certain point. However, that really didn't affect the flow or anything - I could still read it effortlessly.

I like how you made it so that you were a butterfly that was trapped. To have a butterfly trapped in a jar, I think, is cruel because the butterfly is such a harmless, delicate creature. You were some how identifying yourself as a butterfly - trapped with no way of getting out.

Excellent
5/5