I kind of like the off-handedness of this poem. Even tho the subject is gastly, the rhyme and rhythm of the poem keep it merrily bouncing along.

This piece is sad but i found it amazingly well written. I really liked the rhyming you put into this piece and the you kept the flow well with your good choice of words.

This is sad but very relatable

Gimme the blade
make it sharp
after everything is layed
you would know whatsapp
^^
Line 3: "layed" is spelt "laid"
line 4: I think "whatsapp" should be "what's up". It'd make the poem truly what it's meant you make it :)

looking into your ice cold eyes
you really can't careless
am gonna wash the pain off
who cares if i use my blood to do that
^^
Line 2: "Careless" is a term for not being "careful" saying "care less" would make it right
This is a passionate stanza. Very sad!

yeah i wear the smile
it's a mask i can't erase
who really is that happy kid i hear someone say
if only you know how wrong that statement is
^^^
My favourite stanza. "It's a mask I can't erase" beautifully written!

those lovely veins i wanna slit
yes my wrist i wanna split
after the blood spills
it's gonna be just what i need to stitch
^^
I can almost relate to this. I feel I want to do this. Very emotionally written!

i pass the thin blade through my hands
just as i promised
now you break down in tears
oh common it doesn't have to be so.
^^^
Line 4: "common" means it is easy to find it should be "come on"

Wonderfully written piece! I love the rhyme and passion in this poem. I feel like this sometimes. Alone. Until you cut yourself and someone tries to come to your rescue. But it's to late!
Well done 5/5

Gimme the blade
make it sharp
after everything is layed
you would know whatsapp
^^
Line 3: "layed" is spelt "laid"
line 4: I think "whatsapp" should be "what's up". It'd make the poem truly what it's meant you make it :)

looking into your ice cold eyes
you really can't careless
am gonna wash the pain off
who cares if i use my blood to do that
^^
Line 2: "Careless" is a term for not being "careful" saying "care less" would make it right
This is a passionate stanza. Very sad!

yeah i wear the smile
it's a mask i can't erase
who really is that happy kid i hear someone say
if only you know how wrong that statement is
^^^
My favourite stanza. "It's a mask I can't erase" beautifully written!

those lovely veins i wanna slit
yes my wrist i wanna split
after the blood spills
it's gonna be just what i need to stitch
^^
I can almost relate to this. I feel I want to do this. Very emotionally written!

i pass the thin blade through my hands
just as i promised
now you break down in tears
oh common it doesn't have to be so.
^^^
Line 4: "common" means it is easy to find it should be "come on"

Wonderfully written piece! I love the rhyme and passion in this poem. I feel like this sometimes. Alone. Until you cut yourself and someone tries to come to your rescue. But it's to late!
Well done 5/5