Me oh My I love this!!

You will float through the river
of my blue tears and walk through a
dark forest where my sadness grows,
yet hope still cultivates on each leaf.

^ Loved this metaphor, and loved even more the positive attitude behind it!!

Take a quick look at my heart,
maybe you'll see a broken rainbow,
one that I continue to paint, still
remains unfinished but shines through.

^ This stanza was my favorite, just beautifully penned :)

I tell you, one thing I'm usually bothered by is the over use of "you", which you have used a lot of in this piece, however, because of your amazing analogies and because of the hope you can see in the tone of this piece I didn't even recognize them until the third time reading.

I loved this piece Sarah, Excellent work!

You will float through the river
of my blue tears and walk through a
dark forest where my sadness grows,
yet hope still cultivates on each leaf.

Take a quick look at my heart,
maybe you'll see a broken rainbow,
one that I continue to paint, still
remains unfinished but shines through.
^^^^^
this is my fav part of the poem, cause ot shows that you went through a lot of things in life, but still there's hope. And how yous till wanna paint your life with joy and happiness, even though you know that they may not be complete.
Your tone in this poem shows how strong you really are. Great poem, I love it:)

OH WOOOOOOOOOOW!!!!

breathtakingly wondeful!! to be honest i can't say more than that lol

Just stunning :-)

Amazing piece.Much enjoyed.

I have read this three times now,

I like how you varied the 'look through my heart' in each stanza.

I love 'scan through all the clutter'

I am also loving the forest where sadness grows great analogy.

Stanza 3 was definately the best stanza here,

I am just debating in my mind whether in the first line in the final stanza, you have used 'through' could this be 'into?'

Just my thought and it is your poem of course so you are quite welcome to tell me to 'naff off'

It is just 'into' seems more final than through.....

I like this :) even though I don't know why or how. It's just one of those pieces your heart goes out to.

I also like the blue tears part, tears alone resemble sadness, blue along is a huge add-up to sadness.

Well done =)
Write on~

My heart warmed as i read through each stanza, very engaging. Loved how you mixed some nature elements. I'm short of words, all i can say is its superbly written and i love it. ;-)

Take a glimpse of my heart,
scan through all the clutter
of deep love and pain that
depicts my hidden soul.

^^
A fantastic opening. Kind of sad but hopeful too. To me it seems as though you are opening up finally perhaps to someone special or maybe to the world in general..?

Take a peak at my heart,
and you will see with your own eyes,
how much I have loved and cared,
but also how much I have hurt.

^^
I love the alternating first lines - similar, but not the same. Clever. Again, that feeling of sadness, but also awakened hope. You're baring all to everyone (not literally).

You will float through the river
of my blue tears and walk through a
dark forest where my sadness grows,
yet hope still cultivates on each leaf.

^^
I like the 'blue tears' comment -- I've never considered tears having a colour, but I suppose blue would be the choice because it so often represents sadness. I also love the incorporation of nature within this stanza. It made it kinda beautiful - and really special in a way.

Take a quick look at my heart,
maybe you'll see a broken rainbow,
one that I continue to paint, still
remains unfinished but shines through.

^^
This is such a beautiful stanza, but once again I feel that sorrow. I feel like you are trying to rebuild yourself, to start afresh. Turning a new leaf in life. The incorporation of the rainbow is beautifully executed. I love this stanza!

When you glance at my deep heart,
you will discover all of my secrets.
You might understand my true emotions,
and discover that loving you - was my purpose.

^^
There's that hope that I sensed earlier! It seems like you are pushing away the sorrow that you have felt over the years and are now reaching out for the happiness that this new life with this person would surely entail.

When you look through my heart,
you may finally find the real me
that has been dying to shed its
concealed layers of disguises.

^^
A faultless ending - fits perfectly. Hiding your emotions, your true feelings perhaps because you have been hurt and finally erasing that camouflage would be utterly refreshing. (There was a better word -- it's on the tip of my tongue - don't you loathe that?! lol)

A fantastic write, Sarah 5/5

Take a glimpse of my heart,
scan through all the clutter
of deep love and pain that
depicts my hidden soul.

- Good opening, I like how you chose the words scan and clutter, it makes me curious as to what I would find if I had done this.

Take a peak at my heart,
and you will see with your own eyes,
how much I have loved and cared,
but also how much I have hurt.

- I relate to this stanza and often feel this way where I end up getting hurt even though all I try to do is be kind and caring.

You will float through the river
of my blue tears and walk through a
dark forest where my sadness grows,
yet hope still cultivates on each leaf.

- excellent imagery here and creativity, the idea of someone floating through the river that was caused by your tears, and using the forrest to represent your depression and sorrow. Amazing.

Take a quick look at my heart,
maybe you'll see a broken rainbow,
one that I continue to paint, still
remains unfinished but shines through.

- I like this stanza and the the relation to the rainbow, again to express your emotion,it also has a bit of hope in it with the fact you do not give up and continue to paint anyway even though progress might seem slow.

When you glance at my deep heart,
you will discover all of my secrets.
You might understand my true emotions,
and discover that loving you - was my purpose.

- I sometimes wish the emotions in our heart were not so hidden away so we could express them to the people who we need to understand them.

When you look through my heart,
you may finally find the real me
that has been dying to shed its
concealed layers of disguises.

- great ending, I like the term "real me " as if you have been pretending for so long that the real me is so lost inside but just dying to get out.

Great poem, strong emotions and I like the repitition of having to look at the heart all the time, after all that is where all our emotions and pain come from.

good title choice too as it fitted well with the poem and the message.