So sorrowful piece Karla! I think you put all your sadness extract in it. I was affected by the flow.

Wow, what an amazing poem!

I like the language you have chosen, such strong words that really stick in your mind while reading it. Very Powerful impact and make the poem such a powerful piece.

Loved the layout and the punctuation, and your title is very eye catching.

Good job.

Karla,

What a title!!! Liquid sun - the contrast between the texture and temperature was an awesome way to title a poem. I was completely drawn into this poem.

I love how you have described the effect that this person has on you. I love the image of waves being caused and new oceans formed.

Karla you are inspirational.

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I totaly agreed wid lioness..
U r inspirational.

Very well written poem with a nice flow to it.

The sorrow you felt translated very well into your poem which is not easy to do

5/5