I read this a week ago and when I wanted to comment on it now, it was really hard to search for it, haha. You write so much everyday!
Anyway, I loved the scene of a girl stretching her hands for the moon and then when the morning is up, she wishes it calls for her. Sounds like something I'd done, haha. I love the fact that this is raw. I guess it needs some corrections but in all, this was really lovely. And no need to feel unsure about it. :)

'There were barely
any markings left on the tips of a tongue
well adversed
about missing blue skies, daisy porches'

I think this is the best picture I have read in avery, very long while. Like in a month or so. Totally imaginative, creative and so you. I love the simplicity of it and the depth it still holds. Melancholic.
Whatsoever, I guess the first line about departure taking away the dreams isn't really necessary. I feel it's just repeated again in the 'missing blue skies and daisy porches' image and you need the stronger version of the thought. And the one I pointed out is definitely the strongest here. So, I would drop it.

'like the rim
of berries I've sought out to pick,
but just couldn't enclose
my heart around.'

Have I ever told you that you're the best at such imagery? It's gorgeous. You kinda changed your tone here; you were talking f missed dreams and you just quickly switched to berries and lips, even though you're still describing the same thing and I find that clever.
'Yet I still feel the stain around' I would of said 'its stains'? I guess it's connected more to the moon in that way. etter than just a whole different image.

'Because I don't think you can dance
on sunshine, once you've been told
it's already forgotten you...'

I feel this is deeper than what I'm getting. I feel it has you somewhere. And I loved that. The rest just sounded to me ...unpoetic. Like they were too raw for my liking and too repeated, so I guess you might need to edit them a little bit more.

Loved this write, MarryAnne. I love all your writes anyway.
: )
Nice to read you again!

This was amazing the images the emotion all perfect and the last stranza just finished it perfectly I really did love how you finished this masterpiece