The title really caught my attention, its really an awesome piece. I truly love it. Great job..

Andrea...I always like your poems because each one is very different and unique to you...what I mean by that is...the topic is not the same and that's why I love reading your work...this one is no exception...

Vermin remain
hidden,
as sweetened venom
dangles from thine lips.

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I have to say...thine doesn't go too well here IMO..I know your "lips'' would sound a bit wish washy but...poisoned lips maybe?

Vipers slither
as velvet withers,
exposing a naked
innocence.

Rotted tears,
hunted by scars
entangled by violated
tragedies.'

Hunted by scars? did you mean haunted..not sure?

An old soul tosses tails * Tails or tales??
while dreams derail
a scattered tongue

Watching in silence
as the serpent sneaks away
into the night....

Idid really like it...just some thoughts?

Andrea, I think this piece is awesome, I sense you are describing how hurtful and poisonous words can be...and the use of serpent makes.me think.of someone unkind and who makes you feel uncomfortable.
I may be wrong, forgive me but just what stands out here.

Great work anyhow
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I think what I like about writing is that it often leaves room for interpreation. Your dark poems could be about so much and you word them in such a way that I find myself relating to them and pin pointing them to something in my life which it describes.

I liked this one, I think you have such excellent word choice because you know how to pick the powerful words and manage to group them together to create such dark imagery. amazing.

I agree, this piece is "awesome," very dark and causes internal shivers. Amazing vocabulary use with an equally amazing imagination, I hope. :)

Scaryyyy!

U should write horror scripts for movies!!! :P

You are certainly a queen of poetry. The dark images in this one are brilliant!!!

Awesome, freaky

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