Comments : Young Tragedies

  • 11 years ago

    by Wild flower

    Omg I hate these stuff, put me easily onto tears.
    May their souls rest in peace....

    Great job Hannah..

  • 11 years ago

    by Khalid M Darwish

    So sorrowful Hannah! Who drugs can destroy are too many! Diving needs the experts. These are few examples.
    Nice write.

  • 11 years ago

    by L

    This is so sad, young tragedies, I hope the youngster can realize not to drive too fast, not to do drugs, and that could reduce the incidents but they still can happen but a lot less.

    may their souls rest in peace

  • 11 years ago

    by Baby Rainbow

    This is such sad news, but it is so thoughtful of you to write a poem about them. This poem touches me and I feel for everyone who is involved with these people. I hope they have all found peace and are in a better place.

    Your poem is truly unique and I am sure the families would actually appreciate this.

  • 11 years ago

    by Meme

    Ohh this is so sad hon. You reflecting the tragedies of your commnity in your pieces shows how much all you guys are close to each other.

    May they rest in peace ..

  • 11 years ago

    by Purple Rose

    This is terribly sad, Hannah. I hate when these type of things happen, it is so tragic. I have often heard the saying that death happens in threes in one area, or something like that. I have never believed it until three deaths happened on the same road near where I live...you never know when Death will find you or where.

    Typos: the only typos that I can see is in the first line of the second stanza. "teenager' is supposed to be 'teenage.' It would sound better that way :]

    This is just so tragic. You captured all of their stories in one single poem, which is very awesome of you. The one that I thought was probably the most tragic out of all of them would be the second one with the two teenage lovers. Did one kill the other, and then kill themselves? Or were there more people involved? I'm just curious...

    I love that you did this, and the little footnote at the bottom made it all the more better. Very beautiful, Hannah.

    Excellent
    5/5

    • 11 years ago

      by Hannah Lizette

      No, it was murder. Someone shot them and then burnt the car with them inside. :(

  • 11 years ago

    by Purple Rose

    Well that makes it even worse...did they ever catch them? I pray to God they did...

    • 11 years ago

      by Hannah Lizette

      No... it happened about a week ago and all the evidence was burned, so more than likely no one will be caught. :(

  • 11 years ago

    by L

    Did I miss read the poem?

    I thought they shot themselves due to the drugs..

    How unfair, I hope they find whoever did that to them. If not, I believe in karma.

    • 11 years ago

      by Hannah Lizette

      It was a drug deal gone bad pretty much. Just got caught up in the wrong lifestyle with some dangerous people.

  • 11 years ago

    by Decayed

    Oh my. That is a real tragedy.
    I just like how the three stanzas that are distant in content connected together, by decreasing number of victims: 3, 2, 1.

    Prayers to their families.

    Hannah, this piece is flawless. I like how you briefly told a big, sorrowful incident and just gave me shivers.

    Beautiful <3

  • 11 years ago

    by Dagmar Wilson

    My heart goes out to the families. It is
    so sad. I can't begin to imagin their pain.
    You did an excellent job Hannah, this is
    an eye opener, letting us know what is really
    going on in todays world.

  • 11 years ago

    by Lioness

    This poem is completely sad and does show a lot of tragedies that have happened.

    The way you set out the poem I thought was clever, the three first then the two and then the one. It is very poetic but the context is heartbreaking.

    I love this piece and I feel such sympathy for their family in my heart.

    Awesome dedication and write

    x

  • 11 years ago

    by Xanthe

    This is a great dedication, Hannah. I've been coming back to this piece for a while but don't really know how to comment..

    I like the title. It doesn't give away too much but it kind of warns the reader that this would be really sad.
    I also liked how you wrote it with the decreasing number of deaths as it gives this an eerie atmosphere; as though this was planned. I don't know if it was coincidental or you really did it that way but I thought it was creepy - fits however.
    My only suggestion would be to change 'one college student..' to 'a college..' it's quite awkward using one. But that's just my opinion. Another awesome write Hannah. Keep it up :)

  • A sad remembrance of these tragedies and the people who have lost their lives. I know the feeling...

    It's devastating when anyone dies but I think especially when they are young, because they could/should have had such a future ahead of them, but now it will be no more.