Wow..everything about this piece is amazing. The rhyming and your style of writing is wonderful. I also felt the message and the content of the piece was really eye catching, this happens to most of us, we can trust a person but they end up disappointing us in so many ways. Really related to this.

This is a nice piece
the flow was cool
and u had some kind of rhyming in that poem which made it even more fancy
message wise this poem is nice cause it can mean many things for different people
I think betrayal is hard thing either from a friend or a lover.

overall I like this poem alot cause I can somehow relate to it

Edit:that title u used was fantastic lol
(sorry forgot about it haha)

well penned
keep it up =)

Soon they smile again then the voices forces you to regain the trust that caused pain =)

Wow! the tone felt so strong with the 'ust' ..... so powerful!!

Amazing title, first of, it made me curious and want to read...
and then the poem, OMG it flowed flawlessly, and the whole tone of it, was powerful and strong and there was nothing I can critique...

It was amazing
xxxx

MeMe this was amazing! I love the structure and each word standing alone in the first lines, very powerful indeed. You got the rhyming to work great and still held the power in the meaning of the poem.

Just loved it, well done.

First of all I love your rhyme scheme....Oh cool is that??? its in the beginning of the lines... I have been known to do that... but it always looked goofy... and you pulled it off quite nicely!!! LOVE IT...

the message was a powerful punch... very deep and well expressed... love this piece!!

It's one of these poems that I know for a fact I'll never be able to write
A one of a kind
A masterpiece by all means
Mel a5er ya3ni ya benti