I think this is my favorite by you. It's filled with raw emotions; sadness yet you managed to turn this into something beautiful..
I'm sure a lot of us have felt this way some time. And a lot of us don't know how to express that feeling. It's like you've written this for all of us, not just to ease your pain, perhaps. Very touching, thank you for sharing this with us. :)

OH MAN!

What a piece my loveliest friend ?
This was such a good read, actually I read it a couple tripple of times, although it is easy to understand but it just wraps you up, that you want more and more.

The flow omg, it just charmed me, I was SO fond of the way you worded things, let me show you my favorites:

as he knew
even before I,

^
HOLLYCOW! it was so wonderful when reading it along with the stanza...agjdhfjkdsfhj damn damn...

The opening line was so direct that you think this is what the poem is all about, yet you surprise me with a 4rth line saying: they abandoned me...

You widened up the possibilities of what this is going to be about, then you talk about HE...mad me focus on this character that perhaps is the most imp part for you as the poet as well.

The ending oh how dramatic, destined to be alone, abandoned by THEM and HE..them might be .he...as if he is everyone else..everything in her life, or them are the stars the wishes, whatever it's just awesome how you reveal things in a "concealed way" you show, you do not TELL.

Back to the ending, i said dramatic because there is only ONE case when we say we are destined to be alone, not just when we are abandoned, but when we LOSE people who we consider the center of our joy and the center of our life.

Well done, very sad, but it was not melodramatic, it was just beautiful and soft. Word choice was really good, but the way you played with them made them excellent.

Piece to be proud of.

Wow this a perfectly written piece. Sooo touching. Wanna leave a longer comment, but now I can't.

Really great poem, awesome job:)

I found this one a little confusing...well.. in the first stanza at least..

I abandoned my smile
ran away with the moon,
upon a midnight calling
they abandoned me.

The first two lines tell me you have made a decision but the third line confuses me..contradictes what you're saying here I feel? maybe..by adding but to this line would give the reader a better idea..not sure?

Twinkling stars denied
a wish I cast
upon an evening
when my heart
was tossed into the sea.

^^^

Tossing your heart to the sea?....do you know that it may never come back? It's a great line but...you know...it could be lost forever

Sunshine became my
alibi,
as he knew
even before I,
the desires
within were to be free-

I'm wondering why the sun is a male here...I always thought of the sun as female and the moon male?

The ghost of shadows
engulfed the fate
of a woman
destined to be
alone

My thoughts on this ending...you are only as alone as you want to be...maybe keep that in mind yeah?

Andrea...you have reformated this whole poem and...I do hope you're happy with it? To me it looks so much better..a couple of words have made a HUGE different to it....I hope you like it now????

I love it now!!! More than before- and I thank you very much for your helpful ideas!!

I did not know what to expect when I saw that you had posted a new poem.. at first all I could work with was the title and the category. Whenever I hear or read the word "dust" I do not really think about dirt, but rather something old and fading, that maybe settled for a short rest before it disappears in the wind and as depressing as that may be in a way, I also feel as though it's quite fascinating. After all we all know that nothing is eternal, but realizing that some things might gain their freedom with fading is a soothing thought to me.

Anyways, back to the poem: I like the thought of running away with the moon, it feels really sincere and almost hopeless though it could be understood differently too. I mean obviously running away isn't a positive act, but doing it with the moon might be slightly encouraging as the moon has the power to lighten the dark sky and bring us some light during the night.

"Twinkling stars denied
a wish I cast"
^ I think that this is really heartbreaking, it almost feels as though the stars are mocking you by twinkling when rejecting your wish. I mean it's one thing to not reply, but it's another to actually deny something, which emphasizes how much this got to you and how "tough to implement" your wish actually is.

I'm really fond of the fact that you did not only talk about the moon and stars, but the sunshine as well as the shadows, it makes the whole poem seem complete to me and even though it's quite saddening, it really touched me and I enjoyed it. That's why I couldn't help, but to nominate it.

Oh and at first I did not know what to think of the new format, but now that I've read it a few times I actually really adore it. :)

:O

Reading a poem this good stirs something in me...and then to see that the comments on this poem say everything I wanted to...Damn...

I love the style of this...it looks good and when reading it, the heart and mind begin to cross paths and find meaning and understanding.

The emotion in here is subtle yet strong, and that is down to the wording, how you incorporated the essence of the light with sunshine but the dark in shadows, giving it that feel of not being simplistic, complicated emotions but with that beauty of the moon and stars being added as well.

There is a sense of hope with the whole moon thing, how trying to escape by running is a negative image but adding the light to it, gives it a different perspective

You are such an emotive writer but you still manage to make it poetic, instead of being just words and plain emotions

Beautiful, but sad, but amazing

xxxx

Heart-breakingly beautiful
TJ