Comments : Watch what you say (reversed haiku)

  • 11 years ago

    by L

    True, when someone jokes too much then everyone will think that whatever he/she says is a joke. Even if it's on a serious subject.

    It's similar to those who lie too much, when they need for other people to believe them, then the people might be reluctant to.

    nice piece

  • 11 years ago

    by Decayed

    Some might agree or not.. but whatever opinions, I like a lot poems about life & society... so hats-off for that. Nicely written!

  • 11 years ago

    by Wild flower

    I agree and this sometimes lead to bad things happening to that person.
    Awesome write:)

  • 11 years ago

    by Tara Kay

    Okay, interesting piece...it is true that if you lie so many times, people won't believe you...

    My only critique with this is the use of "you're" in the first line, it doesn't read right, "You are" would read much better flow wise, though I guess you changed it to fit the syllable count, it just doesn't work for me.

    But nice piece...

  • 11 years ago

    by Darren

    This is a great haiku khalid, I know how you mean about 'seeing yourself in others eyes'

    Sometimes though I feel we worry too much what other people think of us.

    Joking too much, suggests that they should take life a little more serious.

    nice write

  • 11 years ago

    by Stephen

    This is beautiful. It speaks volumes in three short lines of poetry. If you joke too much you can't be taken seriously, in essence, you become meaningless. Oh how true the line of see yourself through others eyes is! The way people see themselves every day when they glance into the mirror is usually not the same image they reflect out to every one around them. Great work here.

  • 11 years ago

    by Robert Gardiner

    EXCELLENT WRITE!!!