This is cute, I really enjoyed reading this poem. I think you did a wonderful job on writing this acrostic. Plus it had a little humor to it, which is very enjoyable, since there isn't usually much humor in poetry.
Hens sit clucking, awaiting the
*this first line is great. it really caught my attention (: maybe not end the line with "the" though
Arrival of their precious chicks
Their bedding soft, their owners
Caring; readying for chicks to
Hatch one by one, then
Incubating the fluff balls
**these 5 lines paint a really beautiful picture. I can imagine a barn filled with hens and chicks ready to hatch.
Not allowing them to freeze
Growing, forever growing...
**maybe change this line. the flow of repeating growing kinda threw me off
Eggs are born from hens
Gracious little fluffy babes..
Gus carefully collects the chicks:
Sir, that's not a hen!
**I was kind of confused by this last part and read it a few times. now i get it hahaha
this was a great poem and a fun read for me. you are a wonderful writer so please keep up the good work (:
Lovely write, can't really say what the source of inspiration is rather the theme of the poem. What i do know is that you penned a beautiful piece that enjoyable. :) ..
7 years ago
I have read and enjoyed formed poetry before but never really written one. This definitely inspires me to try some time.
This is a great poem, the ending made me smile. I dont often find humor in poems so this must have been really challenging. Truly well done!