Comments : Hatching Eggs (Acrostic)

  • 7 years ago

    by Khalid

    Marvellous poem. I really love funny poems cuz they drive our attention to funny facts.
    Well done

  • 7 years ago

    by Stephen

    This is cute, I really enjoyed reading this poem. I think you did a wonderful job on writing this acrostic. Plus it had a little humor to it, which is very enjoyable, since there isn't usually much humor in poetry.

  • Thank you.
    This challenge was difficult for me, so I'm glad there's been some positive comments back from it. (:

  • 7 years ago

    by Baby Rainbow

    Wow, how unique, very good job, I do wonder what the challenge was?? Lol.

    Nicely written xx

  • 7 years ago

    by just ashley

    Hens sit clucking, awaiting the
    *this first line is great. it really caught my attention (: maybe not end the line with "the" though

    Arrival of their precious chicks
    Their bedding soft, their owners
    Caring; readying for chicks to
    Hatch one by one, then
    Incubating the fluff balls
    **these 5 lines paint a really beautiful picture. I can imagine a barn filled with hens and chicks ready to hatch.

    Not allowing them to freeze
    Growing, forever growing...
    **maybe change this line. the flow of repeating growing kinda threw me off

    Eggs are born from hens
    Gracious little fluffy babes..
    Gus carefully collects the chicks:
    Sir, that's not a hen!
    **I was kind of confused by this last part and read it a few times. now i get it hahaha

    this was a great poem and a fun read for me. you are a wonderful writer so please keep up the good work (:

  • Thanks Ashley..
    I will make amendments now. (:

  • 7 years ago

    by Yakori bint Muhammed

    Lovely write, can't really say what the source of inspiration is rather the theme of the poem. What i do know is that you penned a beautiful piece that enjoyable. :) ..

  • 7 years ago

    by Amy

    I have read and enjoyed formed poetry before but never really written one. This definitely inspires me to try some time.
    This is a great poem, the ending made me smile. I dont often find humor in poems so this must have been really challenging. Truly well done!

  • Yes, it was very challenging for me, but that was the part of challenge I suppose. lol