Comments : A unique pair (Sedoka)

  • 11 years ago

    by Amy

    I have never tried this form but I think I will some time. I like the rhymes.

    The 4th verse has 6 syllables. Still, it is a good poem. I enjoyed reading.

    • 11 years ago

      by Khalid M Darwish

      The word ruin has only 1 syllable (not 2). Check with other poets. Thank you