Great piece! I do have some points:
"Have you not seen" I think should be "Hanen't you seen" and "Do they not" maybe "Don't they"
"no heed" maybe you mean "no head"
Many word should start with small letters such as seen, for, ways, doers, the, wine, live, spirits and the errors.
I think this poem will get better impact if it is little repaired from mistakes.

I am not trying to contradict your comment or be rude in any way but I think the wording of this is great. For instance, most people say "haven't you seen" or "don't they" when speaking or writing. But that is why I love the way Forgotten Soul does not write normal. Normal is boring; uninteresting. In my opinion I would rather read "have you not seen" or "do they not" It actually sounds more elegant. But again this is just MY opinion, do not think I'm trying to dig at you, for you I do not know. You provide great criticism in your own opinion, as do I.

I think she meant to use the word "heed" it fits perfectly. Heed- Pay attention to; take notice of.
But I could be wrong.

Very well written, once again. 5/5