Comments : Sleeping beauty

  • 11 years ago

    by X Harlea X

    This is so sweet and loving. Beautiful ((5))
    ~Harlea

  • 11 years ago

    by Chelsey

    Too cute..I want kids, oh wait, I need a husband lol..Im jk. I dont want them, however this is such a cute piece and I could picture this whole thing being a night time routine in a household! Thats awesome! I have a Godson and hearing him say "Goodnight Chechi love you" melts me to my knees. This poem reminded me of him <3

    Lovely!

  • 11 years ago

    by Naughtymouse

    Tony, i really like this write :-) i wrote something for my son a while back called daddys little soldier and i always love it when a poet writes for their children , especially when it evolves around a bed time - in my own personal preference i particulaly like it when the piece has a lullaby quality to it, it's how i rate a poem of this nature to be honest. and i really write this poem :-) your usual flare with words and flow were great but it's that lullby qualtiy of the piece that shines bright for me, genuinely one of my favourite pieces from you, and when your little girl grows up you have to make her read it :-)

    Great job dude 5/5 all day long :-)

  • 11 years ago

    by Darren

    This is great tony, you capture the love between father and daughter beautifully.

    I like how you use the sleeping beauty story, but I love the mood of the whole thing, very calm and proud.

    You can tell that she is precious to you.

  • 11 years ago

    by Masked metaphor

    Wow Tony, such a beautiful write, I have got to say the first stanza gripped me straight away with the beautiful imagery of nature and the transformation from the sun set to the moon rising. You have captured this transition very well and I like the word you have used 'banished' carrying such powerful connotations of abandonment but it becomes replaced by the elegance of the silver moon. I also admire the images of the starry night sky I find it very clear imagery drawing the reader back to memories of a beautifully lit sky.

    I love the direction of this poem as it allows us to travel through your mundane activities as your little girl goes to sleep and we get to see into the connections you share which is well embedded within this piece. The ending i find is so powerful and brings this poem to a complete bliss as it ends so sweetly with the words I love you, an emotion so true between father and daughter.

    I really enjoyed reading this poem, it lifted my spirits.
    Well penned with emotional value in every segment

    5.5 from me

  • 11 years ago

    by Meme

    Ohhh that is so sweet Tony! I never knew you had a little girl :)

    I love poems that mention classical fairytales in them (I guess all girls do as well, lol) it feels real like this happens so regualrly in your life which makes it really nice to read it in a poetic way.

    Great job!

  • 11 years ago

    by Lioness

    I feel a sense of warmness when someone writes a poem about their children. You can certainly feel the love in the words that you have for your child and obviously the love that she has for you. It is truly beautiful.

    A simple bed time story reading and you have transformed this poem into something more and I think it's because of the fact that it means so much to you.

    Awesome write, I LOVED IT

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