Frustration cracks across the bitter sky,
your voice booms, colliding with rumbling clouds,
echoing past snow-capped mountain tops,
blasting straight into my tired ears.

- such a powerful opening verse Hannah, it creates an imagery of the horrific sound you are describing and through your description we can imagine how unpleasant, loud and scary it would be. Straight away I thought of a storm, like a hurricane etc and how this is what it would be like. But then I do also see another side which is a voice of someone dangerous who who has hurt us, and if you read it that way, this is how it feels to hear them too and know they are getting closer!

Splintered pieces of what once was our home,
now lay in pieces and piles,
waiting to be salvaged and boxed,
waiting to be labeled his or hers.

- This is so sad, to think the victims lose the things that can never be replaced, we ( as other countries ) can help by sending food and water and materials but we can never give back their airlooms, photographs and family memories which are priceless, this thought is so sad because I couldn't imagine losing all of my special things.
- the second part I saw of this was again perhaps a person like an Ex or someone who has hurt us, we thought we were at home with them but they broke the home up and perhaps the labelled boxes is through the seperation and each person taking their own belongings back. another sad thought.

I'm cold.
I don't know how to keep warm without you,
I need you to be my rock salt.
Will you salt the rocky road
that leads you straight back into my forgiving heart?

- this made it clearer for me that this storm was a great metaphor for a the break up of a relationship. It is clear here in this part that you miss them and want them back and perhaps have been through this before with them, the fact that your heart is forgiving, suggests you will forgive them more than once because you love them that deeply.

Please don't let us become just another natural disaster.

- love the ending line, great idea to use this metaphor to express your emotions. I love it hannah xx

You are amazing Hannah.... I know its so creepy to think of us in that situation and live it to be recalled and associated with an unpleasant event like natural disaster... You brought up the emotions well... <3
Stay strong hun:)

Very powerful piece you have here Hannah, first I would like to say this poem is excellent. I love when people uses common things to describe the ups and downs in a relationship.

Using a natural disaster to express the feelings and damages that has been cause such as...

Frustration cracks across the bitter sky,
Your voice booms, colliding with rumbling clouds,
echoing past snow-capped mountain tops,
blasting straight into my tired ears.

This thought right here sets the scene and creates imagery in my head; I can picture the snow cover mountains and imagine the impact of loud sounds blasting in my ears.

Another part that caught my attention is...

I'm cold.
I don't know how to keep warm without you,
I need you to be my rock salt.
Will you salt the rocky road
that leads you straight back into my forgiving heart?

Here when you express that you are cold who has been the victim of a natural disaster and don't understand these feelings? I know I would feel cold and devastate by such horrific event.

Favorite part is...Will you salt the rocky road
that leads you straight back into my forgiving heart?

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Aww Hannah Nannah,

I want to snuggle you :)

This piece is so sad to me, coming from divorced parents who split four years ago, I know what disasters are like. Painful as ever, but at least in this poem youre still fighting for the relationship.....as long as their is effort on both parties I think these disasters can be avoided.

Loved your metaphor here, and I really liked the rock salt! Very creative..

You know I adore your writing <3

I'm sorry,
I hope it doesn't become another natural disaster, and that it's just a false alarm.

There are little things that can be repair, I just hope that that's the case in here and that it's nothing that can't be.

I wasn't sure where u were going with this
Until half way through , nature has been used
To describe feeling but this felt utterly unique

Such powerful words the images just stick in
Your head , a really awesome piece :)

I like how you have compared your relationship with nature, in this case a natural disaster. Each verse which you have weaved with nature shows the reader how rocky one's relationship is and the way to fix this disaster...well penned...take care.

Loved it, couldn't have said it better myself

Loved it, couldn't have said it better myself

Oh Mercy, this hits home for me on a personal level.... I too forgave and almost fell victim to a "Natural Disiaster" Myself... :-( and now I'm teary eyed, but also comforted with this write...

Hannah- the Metaphor you designed for the message was beyond fitting and creative... truly love the angle you took with this... and the feelings wrapped within added that special ending! Beautiful piece!!