Comments : Nocturnal World (Haynaku Verse)

  • 8 years ago

    by Khalid

    I loved the title! It speaks it all. The last line "lightly lurking lazily" is applicable but not to most species. Some animals do lurk in the night but not lazily. They find the appropriate chance to be as most interactive (for example, wolves and hyenas). Well, I like your idea and I'm not against it but the word "lazily" can fit for some (not all) species. It's your decision and you can ignore me after all, just an opinion.
    Great job.

  • 8 years ago

    by Amreen

    Wow.... great attempt Alisha... I love your piece.... Good Attempt:)

  • Thank you Khalid for your thoughts, I will consider changing this.

    Thanks Amreen.