Comments : The Invisible (Pt.2)

  • 13 years ago

    by L

    Not yet, not yet...

    I need to watch that show.
    However, nice piece.

    I like the part about no face.. it's an invisible man.. but does that mean it doesn't have a face? I guess his face was seen because of the bandages.

    • 13 years ago

      by Blood of a Lion

      Basically as you read it it brings out that Stew-art/Henry/Stuart witnessed the invisible man eating making him have to kill him.

  • 13 years ago

    by Mohan

    Excellent job i love this

  • 13 years ago

    by Unknown

    I'm glad you added a part 2. :)

    On the sixth line - I think "Thank the gods" ... I believe Gods should be capitalized. Anything pertaining to God, Gods, Lord ...even He or Him should be if you are talking about Him/Them ...since you said "Gods"... oh, and last line the Lord should be capitalized. Sorry, I've rambled with that... it's not a big deal, haha.

    Moving on...

    I like how you incorporated him talking to himself... or maybe it's just his thoughts... but it gives it a nice touch. It shows his madness.

    So, to cut the story short... the man, whatever his name is... saw him eating ... not him in particularly, but the food. He put two and two together...so of course, he had to kill him.

    From the ending... I sense there will be a part 3?

    • 13 years ago

      by Blood of a Lion

      There might be I'm not sure yet. Thanks for the comment!