Comments : Crimes of Passion

  • 11 years ago

    by Khalid M Darwish

    Brilliant!! I loved the word you chose here. Away of some grammatical errors, this poem is full of passion starting from the title till the end. I loved your way of begining the poem with questioning then presenting the consequences of his ignoring to her as a result. Some words have to be revised, however. For example in the expression "because he have her like death has no end" should be "he has" and "When all he does is hurts her" if I'm not mistaken, should be "is hurt her". Well these are minor points but you did well with dividing the poems into 3 stanzas as a resting period for the author.
    Nice poem

    • 11 years ago

      by ornella

      THANK YOU SO MUCH