Comments : Telephone wire

  • 11 years ago

    by Ole Carsten

    Oh, auch a poem, that is hurtful in a special way.
    Like listning to music from Anthony and the Johnson.
    A lovely flow, but still hurtful

  • 11 years ago

    by Angie

    OMG Chelz, even though this piece is filled with sadness and heartache, it is amazing and unique. The title was so interesting that I just had to read it never expecting what I read... your first stanza was so dramatic and drew me in right away and I couldn't wait to read further... after reading this through, my heart hurts to just imagine how someone could treat a person this way, without a care in the world... this literally breaks my heart, to know the pain that this has caused... to write with so much passion as this to cause the reader to feel the pain of the writer, is pure talent and girl, you have it! Well done Chelz...

  • 11 years ago

    by Maple Tree

    Every time I see a pair of tennis shoes dangle on phone wire, Ive often wondered about the person who wore them... and why are they up there?

    You know have given me an angle to ponder...

    using the wire and shoes as a metaphor for your heartfelt feelings is beyond powerful and creative Chels... this poem is breathtaking!

  • 11 years ago

    by Tara Kay

    Chels, The metaphors you used are always so creative. I loved this piece, for it tells a story of the simplest things and the reasons for them.
    You always write with such emotion, and conviction, the imagery and feelings were so strong here.
    xxx

  • 11 years ago

    by Poet on the Piano

    Wow, the hurt and pain of the heart is expressed so strongly here, it makes me sad just thinking the deeper meaning with dangling on the telephone wire- what a story you tell of your emotions here...I was speechless at the end. I don't think it's ever to late to reclaim your voice. Amazing write, the metaphor really made this poem incredibly reflective each time I read it!! :]