Comments : The Lure of an Amorous, Seductive, Woman... (Sonnet)

  • 11 years ago

    by Darren

    Well done on writing a sonnet, anybody who does this successfully deserves a pat on the back,
    I am getting used to your machine gun scattering of commas. This breaks the poem up so much that it has to be read slowly, taking in every word. This I believe is your point.
    As always from you it is very descriptive and excitable.
    great piece.

  • 11 years ago

    by Meena Krish

    A very passionate Sonnet for a very beautiful woman (from what I've read). The rhymes matched well keeping the flow of the poem smooth and readable...very, very nice!

  • 11 years ago

    by PETER EDWARDS

    Just love the way you use words Robert!
    Every line I loved, so descriptive!
    A nice piece of writing.

  • 11 years ago

    by Ingrid

    Well done on this Sonnet, Robert.

    Just to show you something, I am going to post your poem below, but with less commas and less capitals. You tell me how that looks, ok?

    As to the content: a true Robert poem, filled with adjectives to describe the female beauty with verve:)

    5/5 Ingrid

    Nubile Goddess, to you my Heart belongs,
    Captured by you, wholly, each time I'm left,
    spellbound, uttery, by your siren Song,
    Lost within the Magic, which you possess.

    Coquettish, coy, heartstrings, you play, at will.
    All rendered, helpless, to your Rhapsody.
    Fascination, fancy, from you, out spills.
    Bewitched, I am, left in such ecstasy.

    Fanciful, the feeling you leave me in,
    My Heart, in Flight, my Soul, a fluttering.
    Enchanted, each and every part of me,
    Raptured, charmed, engrossed, irrevocably.

    By You, I am left in such wonderment.
    A Slave, I am, to your every penchant.