Whr were u?
Were u writing this poem al d time?
Coz its beautiful(beautiful).

Thanks:) This poems is about 2 years old, I just posted after running across it in my notebook.

I am in love with this, I totally relate to it and understand the words.

Between each line is soeone trapped between a love that is not real but the heart can trick us in any many ways and we become entangled int hings that are no good for us.

I like how you there is a sense of knowledge throughout the poem, in that you know yourself they do not love you for who and what you are, and that you deserve better but somehow this love has tainted you and you feel unable to escape from it.

Brilliant poem xx

Why when I think of you I become blue? Why does the thoughts of loving you make me become unglued?

Insightful stanza to begine your poem with, I loved it.

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You make me question the path that I was destine to take, making me abandon the vows I once made.

This reveals how much hysteric your case because of him. This is inspiring.

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Leading me without a sure destination, creating in me a spirit of desperation.

Sometimes we say "love is blind" but some other times this makes the more powerful pole to lead the other one, as you said without a sure destination, resulting in a spirit of desperation. Marvelous stanza.

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Tainted is your love and allusive is your desire, but somehow it lights my fire.

A powerful stanza, especially the last 3 words. I loved it.

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Offering this desperate heart lies, making me see only through your dark eyes.

So powerful description you made here.

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You have became my sanctuary my means of prayer, you keeping breaking me into pieces so that I will become unrepairable.

I loved the similes of unrepairable pieces, like glass.

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Why do I love you? When you only love what I can do. Why do I believe that one day you'll need me too?

Good insightful questions.
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Why do I live in a reality that don't exist? Because I am tainted by a love that's truly sick.

The word "don't" should be "doesn't".

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Overall:
I found your poem so powerful and bearing meaningful wording, metaphore and similes.

You made me question the
path that I was destine to
take, making me abandon
the vows I once made.

^^Little spelling error. Second line should be 'destined' (: But I put this stanza in the comment because it's my favorite. I love the recognition that you left behind the path you were on, the ideas that you had for your life. By stating that, it makes the piece more heartbreaking and wonderful.

"Why do I live in a reality that
doesn't exist? Because I am
tainted by a love that's truly sick."

I love the last stanza. It wraps everything up, wonderfully and it's worded so perfectly! This is a terrific write.

You are in a relationship with someone who obviously doesn't feel the same way. You shower them with love and affection, yet they don't do anything in return for you. You know you deserve better...but you still stay, hoping they will change and begin to love you for who you are instead of what you can do for them. You're tainted by them using you.

Very strong emotional piece!

Loving somebody that does not feel the same way is very painful. The heart i telling us one thing and the mind something else. Often deep down inside we know but we hope that maybe one day the feelings for us will change. Love should be a two way street, we deserve to be with somebody that will love us the same way. Excellent write

This is a strong and powerful yet heartbreaking piece. I really could relate to it and AL you described your emotions brilliantly. Also the flow is good.
Keep penning:)

Your meter is delightfully unorthodox. Your tone is bleak and overcast, and it is wonderful. I feel like you've captured the negative aspects of a rainy day. That backdrop allowed me to really appreciate this one.

Really good. Keep the writing up.

Two songs played through my mind when i read this. "Tainted Love" by soft cell, and another one... "light my fire" by the doors...

not necessarily a bad thing but it was really a blast from the past, from about halfway through ti made the poem read like an old 80s, 90s song. now both of those songs are stuck in my head...

anyway content wise it was very powerful and emotionally packed. i wonder if you were lsitening to music when you wrote this? the rhyme scheme is interesting.

This is amazing, so powerful and raw. I love the theme of pleasure and pain and how your conflicted about whether you should be enjoying such torture, even though you know the answer. Great write; keep it up!