by average thoughts
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I can sing this poem..like a rap song..i loved it .lillie.. |
by E Dacaf
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I feel the word poison is over used. its in everyone of the first four stanzas. maybe try other words like concoction or elixir? |
by Darren
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I like how you choose to rhyme. |
by lillie
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Thnx darren :) means a lot |