Comments : Witching Hour

  • 11 years ago

    by ah satan 666

    @.@!!!

    I love "Witching Hour" title got me :)

    I have a thing for nature writes at the minute and this one I'm exceptionally fond of, as it seems to have a hint of "Dark magic" to it.

    Well penned missy :)

  • 11 years ago

    by Maple Tree

    Oh yes!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

    I really love this Tanka!!!

  • 11 years ago

    by Baby Rainbow

    Oh, this is like a mixture of dark and nature! Such a good mix together which isn't done too often. Wording here is very eye catching and it is enjoyable to read, well done.

    • 11 years ago

      by Rusheena

      Thanks for the lovely comments, girls! :]

  • 11 years ago

    by Khalid M Darwish

    The silver crescent
    kisses beautiful creatures
    and christens their deep slumber,
    while shadows slither through grass
    and swallow innocence whole.

    Your marvelous deep imagery in this poem made it my favourite!! Now I won't concentrate on the syllable count (although the 3rd line exceeded 5 to show 7) because what made me love is the idea, the topic and the finishing of the poem with the innocence. The title is superior and unique.
    Thank you for sharing that with us.

    • 11 years ago

      by Rusheena

      Thanks, Khalid! I got the syllable count mixed up again. Hopefully, I'll get the hang of it soon.

  • 11 years ago

    by Maple Tree

    3rd line: change it too...

    christens deep slumber

    and it will stand true tanka form.. this is a beautiful piece and you did a nice job.. <3

  • 11 years ago

    by Darren

    What a great little tanka, a good tanka is a poem that appears to be saying so much more than at first glance. It is almost like this is a poem stripped right back to using only those words that matter. I also enjoyed the hint of darkness that crept in. Plus there is a smidging of alliteration thrown in for good measure. This is like a tinderbox of imagery exploding through every syllable. From the great opening line describing the moon to the final line that gives it its dark twist. Great Tanka Rusheena and worthy of 4 points at least. Well written.