Comments : The kiss of nature (Haiku)

  • 6 years ago

    by Rusheena

    Simple yet it speaks volumes. I love haikus because they only give you room to include the important details, and you do this very well. Nice work.

  • 6 years ago

    by Michael

    I love the description of this poem
    the choice of language is brilliant
    and this haiku is brilliant

    keep up the good work 5/5

  • 6 years ago

    by Michael

    I love the description of this poem
    the choice of language is brilliant
    and this haiku is brilliant

    keep up the good work 5/5

  • 6 years ago

    by Meena Krish

    Winter night ended
    the red sun kisses this world

    ^^A nice image here where winter is over and
    a new day is rising with a red sun. I also like
    how you have used the word "kiss" here for the red sun is big and it does look like it is kissing the world. In fact I awoke to a red sun this morning and it was a lovely sight..just like this image!

    flowers soon wake up

    ^^The sign of Spring awakes in flowers first as they stretch out and reach for the rays. A nice Haiku :)

  • 6 years ago

    by Kips

    Beautiful Haiku! Short but deep in meaning.

  • 6 years ago

    by onethuscome

    Haikus is short for "people who cant finish a poem"

    • 2 years ago

      by mossgirl19

      Omg...actually haikus are for "people who can express beauty in 17 syllables."

  • 6 years ago

    by Hellon

    Onethuscome...I checked out your account and found you have never attempted a haiku so if that's all you have to say about this form then.....it's probably best you didn't comment at all?

    Winter night ended
    the red sun kisses this world
    flowers soon wake up

    Ok I love the picture you have painted in my mind with your first two lines here but...I can't remember what it's called now but your third line should make a different statement..relating to the first two...Mmm...wish I could remember but...my suggestion is this...

    When winter night ends
    with red sun kissing the world:
    in the morn, flowers.

    I think there's supposed to be an element of surprise in the third line?

    Just my thoughts...

  • 4 years ago

    by uttAm

    Your haikus are so lively....great write!

  • 2 years ago

    by mossgirl19

    This is a really lovely haiku! I love haikus!

    Regarding Hellon's comment, her suggestion is really good too, except that I wouldn't change anything about this haiku. I think it is awesome as it is. The element of surprise is there on the third line.