I'm trying to figure out what it was that it was done on this piece, but I think it's like a villanea.. or a terzalle.. I forget how they are spell.

But there are 19 lines in total, I know they follow a rhyme scheme and I think it was follow on this one. I like the flow and the story.

I might be back to leave a better comment, but I can't promise. but Thanks for sharing.

Excellent poem i like the flow and description

i have only 1 critique the words rewound and around lose the flow a little bit for the rhyme

apart from that excellent poem 5/5

Excellent poem i like the flow and description

i have only 1 critique the words rewound and around lose the flow a little bit for the rhyme

apart from that excellent poem 5/5

Villanelle, I see. :)
Wonderful form, I'm not too adventurous with my forms, I usually don't stray from haiku's, senyru's or acrostics... but I always have respect for someone who takes the time to do these types of forms!

Wonderful, spiritual message. :)