Very beautiful, I liked it quite a bit... An interesting spin on last loves

I really like that I couldn't figure where the story was going. Nice twist at the end. The speaker seemed like a victim at first but turned out to be a femme fetale. Love it! One suggestion, in the second line of the second stanza, "lay" should be "lie", since it is a person and not an object. Nice work.

Wow this is incredible.. u sent shivers down our spines

Simple but sweet

Wonderfully Dome!!!