Comments : Nameless (Acrostic)

  • 11 years ago

    by Tara Kay

    I felt able to relate to this Meme...which is why I voted for it...you took the prompt, and actually chose something pretty simple in terms of just one word but you penned a piece that I think, is beyond the words of my capability...

    Beautiful beautiful words...sad and sometimes a frightening thing, is being unheard...but you took the title and just wrapped it up brilliantly...with an awesome message and story

    x

    • 11 years ago

      by Meme

      Thanks sweetie :)

  • 11 years ago

    by Hannah Lizette

    I seen this name and almost picked it! lol Great minds think alike. :)

    I like that you made this an acrostic, it truly brought out the content of this poem. You feel nameless because of the of the abuse and the way he has made you feel, no longer who you used to be.

    Perfect pen! <3

    • 11 years ago

      by Meme

      Yes, great minds do think alike :P

      Thanks a lot for the comment dear :)

  • 11 years ago

    by Karla

    Stunning piece.

  • 11 years ago

    by Hellon

    I like the annonymity of your title (hope my spelling is correct haha)

    Never mind the scars that were
    abandoned on every inch of my skin;
    mending them will never help me to
    erase the person he made me be.
    Lifeless; I dragged my aching body to
    escape his tormenting touch, but he
    still marked me then left me only as a
    strayer from the girl I once used to be

    I know you like honest critique but....I can only offer one suggestion because this was just so very well written that I'm struggling right now...ok..

    abandoned on every inch of my skin;
    ^^^
    Can't remember what that little thing at the end of this sentence is called but ...I'd replace it with an exclamation mark my skin! Bigger statement IMO?

    No other critique to give you this time girly...great poem....

    • 11 years ago

      by Meme

      Oh thanks a kot Hellon, you know how much I love your critiques :)

  • 11 years ago

    by PinkyPrincess

    Wow... What an intriguing poem Meme! I got goosebumps while reading this poem... it was filled with raw and dark emotions. You penned it perfectly... I really enjoyed it!

  • 11 years ago

    by Thomas

    Amazing piece Meme!

    It pains me to read that people hurt themselves over other people. Making the suffering they caused permanent.
    I wish I could erase those scars and prevent them from ever getting there.

    • 11 years ago

      by Meme

      Thank you Thomas, your comment means a lot :)