I like the way you have adapted this this story to your writing style great work
I love stories from Greek mythology.

I really liked your use of language, and your rhymes were strong. ONe thing I will say, though, is that I think the third line in the second stanza is a little too short. I understand that because of the next line is slightly longer, making the line before shorter should balance it out, but I think it's a little too short.

I also particularly liked the last line. It was strong.

Brad

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