Such a beautiful poem... But then the end
Completely ripped my heart to shreds ...

This is one of the best I've read from you

Amazing

Great piece. Its amazing. I love the flow and the massive amounts of emotion. Excellent descriptions. Well done

Would like to have nominated this piece but am unable to nom from the love section of the site.

This poem is beautiful and sad and raw, so worth reading.

I hope she gets to read it.

how her smile used filled him
to the brim ^^^^

used to fill him?

Ill be back with a better comment but right now before I forget ... on this line:

even now... there are not words
in the tongues of man

^^ I think it would sound better as there are no words instead of not.

And on

how her smile used filled him
to the brim

^^ her smile used to fill. :)

I always love when someone chooses to write about traveling to a foreign land to meet the love of their life, it's just pure romance. So, love that aspect of this poem. :)

The different metaphors you used to describe her eyes were nice, most people only use one... you used a few ... to describe different ways you view her eyes... the color, the warmth, etc. I love the mention of bluebells, they are beautiful. :)

Obviously, complete adoration of this woman... everything about her radiates perfection in your eyes.

"Adoration still aflame
in his tiny.
Charring.
Heart."

^ I like the quick change here... he's still in love, but absolutely heartbroken! It lets the reader make up their own assumption as to why the relationship failed and why he was left with a broken heart.

The ending is just heart wrenching and beautiful at the same time. No matter how bad she hurt him, he still adores her and thinks of her every single day. And the note at the end.... </3

Absolutely amazing write!

Okay, I'm back

And I don't have a well written comment but I re-read the Poem and now it sounds better.

There's this line though:

She would speak such
melodious perfection,

I think that it would sound better as "she would speak in such melodious perfection." I don't know the way it's written makes me feel like it misses something so I thought that the way she spoke was perfection.
Rather my question would be, are you trying to describe the way she speaks? Or describe what she spoke? Lol I don't know how to explain. May be that single line is just me, so please ignore it.

I don't have any other critiques. It's good.

I nominated this poem! It is such a good poem

Taylor you never cease to amaze me. You have a very good talent with writing poetry. Well done!

You make love sound so delicate, so graceful. Yet the sadness shows, suffering hidden beneath the beauty of the words you choose. This poem stirred up quite a lot of emotion, I think the way you have written this is really striking, it hits hard and makes the reader feel such a strong sense of sympathy. An excellent poem, 5/5

Nice
I like it. It remembers me something.

Nice
I like it. It remembers me something.

I like the sequencial arrangement of prepositions in the last stanza:

She forged him into
something different than a man.
In the fires of his happiness,
from the steel of his adoration,
into something new -
and lonely without her.

and even the word choice like "fires", "steel".
You rocked it here.

Good write. I like the line, "through the hearts of angels." The best. I've written a lot about hearts and Angels but never put the two together. seemed like it got a little hopeless at the end. All in all good write.

There is something in your wiords that makes me feel that this piece is amazing it is purely you and your soul. Finaklly i understand that feeling whe writing,

I love this piece, it is sweet and heartfelt. It reminds me of the way I feel about someone now, the only thing is that they do not know and they do not want to know. They refuse to understand the depths of my heart for them. Here it seems in a way I can relate to the way he is to me. His eyes are brown and his hair is dark, but your descriptions are still amazing about one person be so important to you. I love this poem, it is so heartfelt, so beautiful, so detailed. I hope the person its for, found their way here and finally understoond. You really were in love and you really were perfect abnout this.