Comments : Halcyon (Acrostic)

  • 11 years ago

    by Tara Kay

    I remember reading through the poems and kept getting drawn back to this one, I felt that even though the form was simple it was really well executed, the flow was flawless and I loved the gentle tone and the wording...

    I can't explain what it was that drew me to the piece each time exactly, but I thought it was beautifully done, so congrats on the win :)
    x

  • 11 years ago

    by TSI25

    This pretty much screams college life at me... the night time and instantiation of the scene sort of make me think of a party, especially with the mention of a tequila sunrise.

    (good party drink, but im more of a vodka-from-a-flask kind of person)

    the rest of the lines seem to be a kind of artful exposition of the following decisions that get made; people stumbling home with hookups and/or friends... continuing the celebration or passing out in drunken bliss; only to regret it in the morning.

    in a way, because i interpreted it like that initially, it almost rings in a sarcastic tone. your acrostic term, halcyon typically refers to a period that was idyllically happy and peaceful. to me, party's arent exactly peaceful, but the feeling of elation makes sense, and would be amplified by booze-ahol, sarcasm comes from the inevitable following morning.

    of course, maybe i just interpreted it completely incorrectly. ah well, good write.

  • 11 years ago

    by L

    Halcyon, I like that word.

    I think in this acrostic halcyon is use as an adjective to denote a period of time in the past that once was happy and peaceful.

    My interpretation is that there is a couple who were/are in love, at night, they went to bed to sleep then woke up to find each other together, and the sun peeking at their window but not entirely. It was morning and they were still sleep but since it was morning, the sun arrived --- like the type of love that warms the soul and makes it drunk arrived. So my thoughts are that this couple could only be together on summers. I can't put my ideas together.

    But I did got a peaceful and happy image.

  • 10 years ago

    by Michael D Nalley

    You defined the word so beautifully it makes me want to add it to my weak vocabulary

  • 10 years ago

    by Redangelwings

    The title is very strong I agree I also had to look it up actually. I loved how you used it for an acrostic though. As the word halcyon means I loved the flow and peacefulness this poem brings to my heart. I also love how you have written the poem as well. It flows so very well here. The lines seem to mesh as one.

    I loved how you used tequila sunrise as well. It seems like you are saying that you can get drunk or happy off just a sunrise. I think however it's more than that because you are with the one you love. By the tone of the whole poem it seems like you are just waking up in each others arms I believe. I love also how you say the night ends.

    In my mind that means you stayed up all night with this person and are now watching the sunrise. The holding of hands is an extremely nice and heartwarming touch as well. Anyway the poem overall is great as it seems to tell a love story within the words you wrote. The whole tone is super relaxed so again I loved the title choice. Great write.