To me, when I read this - I thought of a girl giving up her baby for adoption. Whatever intended, this poem is good, and it makes you think deeply. I don't know why I feel like I can't say much about this. It really is just grasping hold of my heart and shutting my mouth. And once you get to know me, you'll learn that my inability to comment properly on a piece is a rare thing, because I guarantee you, I'll flip out and freak over some of your other stuff, but this, I just can't do.
Because of your ability to render me speechless, and the depth of this, I gave it a nomination.
Really, this is a fabulous write, I can't stress that enough. I hope everyone who has me favorited sees this comment and reads this poem. Seriously, I'll will do everything I can to expose this piece. I'm totally in love.
Absolutely amazing - and this piece is in my favorites!
This is an interesting piece with a perceivably strong female protagonist. how admirable is the soul that works hard, and how saddening when hard work goes unrewarded.
from the very beginning this poem has a bittersweet hopefulness; "dreams bigger than she'll ever have" and it culminates on a despondent note at the end "waiting for a future that belongs to someone else."
i find myself wondering, though, who that some one else is. is it the moocher, content to steal the accomplishments of others... or a synthetic machination of the self...
is all my waking effort in pursuit of sating a version of myself that is not truly me...
very thought provoking, and very powerful for a short piece. well done.