Aww sweetie. This is so beautiful.

First of all, i liked the rhyme scheme you put in this piece but must say that the tenses and punctuation are not perfect. You put a fullstop but then start the next line with a small letter which is not allowed.

Due to the bad punctuations, i felt the flow of the poem was off balanced but its nothing a little editing wont be able to fix...overall, i liked the content and message you were conveying in this piece so i give it a 4

Sweet poem.