Comments : Time Traveler (Triple Tetractys)

  • 10 years ago

    by Tara Kay

    Meme, I loved this write. I voted for this one, it just had such a nostalgic yet sad tone to the write, and I love the word "Nudiustertian" and its meaning...really creative and I love the form too.

    This piece was really well penned and I loved it! :)

  • 10 years ago

    by Amreen

    Excellent piece Meme... Your words pour magic and a gloomy imagery here. Very interesting word chosen. The deep story you convey here is saddening.

    Keep writing:)

    • 10 years ago

      by Meme

      Thanks a lot ladies :)

  • 10 years ago

    by Poet on the Piano

    "nudiustertian night."

    - Oh wow, I had to look that one up. But it's neat how you don't just say the day before yesterday, you make it sound more nostalgic in a way.

    There is such yearning in this poem, and this girl sacrifices for her love and is almost hopeless against time. Time and life move on without looking back and taking her into consideration; it's hard to adapt and accept that.

    "because time will
    never look back at what it left behind."
    - The ending was very final and melancholy, like there is nothing more to reality than this. She will not be able to hold him again and in that truth, it's heartbreaking for her to have to realize that, no matter how much she wants it differently.

    Love the form too, especially as a triple tetractys and not just a double!

    Well done :]

    • 10 years ago

      by Meme

      Thank you so much for your comment. And yes, time is only thing that we get to watch as it slips away from our hands without us having the power to stop it or rewind it...

  • 10 years ago

    by Chelsey

    You should list what that word means on here so your readers know the challenge and can give you the credit you deserve! This was a hard challenge and I thought you all did wonderful with this..Thanks for introducing me to this word.

    The form here is just flawless, I like that you did the triple tectractys! Fits so well ehre, and you did amazing...

    Love the story line in this piece girl...so interesting.

    • 10 years ago

      by Meme

      I should've added it. I will right now :)

      And thanks a lot for your great challenges Chels, I love them <3