You really showed the influence of others' opinions as well as the harsh critique we give ourselves unrealistically.....how those expectations and images can completely warp a young woman's mind about what beauty means. I think it's hard because that mirror is always there, and many times we may not be happy with how we look, no matter how we try. There's such a helplessness in this girl.... losing sight of reality and who she can really be, so she settles for this... I liked how you brought in the half-drunk bottle, that was saddening as well as her want for love, to be seen and held by someone.
Those last lines were chilling! Made me think it may be her last night or if she is going to make it through? Wanting to hide beneath a fantasy world that is putting to much pressure, because nothing and no one is perfect. Surreal voice you carried here.
So happy that you got inspired so quickly again, I love & miss your poems!
This definitely brought you out of your comfort zone but it was absolutely perfectly written. The emotions & reality of how media & such around us portray people today and how some often strive to be just like these celebrities or whomever they way be. We all do have that one thing about us that we dislike & wish we could change and rejecting the image of us in the mirror often helps a bit yet in this case it gets the best of her and she's unwilling to accept it and gives up. As much as the ending is sad, I think you ended it so perfectly. Well done!
8 years ago
Even though it was inspired heavily by the challenge there is a lot of depth in this piece. It feels like a lot of people can relate to this in some way or another.