I love the rhyme in the poem and it flows very nicely.
The idea behind it is very interesting. The idea of someone broken hearted that uses sex (as I saw it) as a way to temporarily clear their thoughts of all the negativity. It's interesting but not uncommon. The images in my head show... well, after all the intense stuff... just someone holding the girl in his arms, just happy to have the feel.
Another amazing piece. so much of emotions and sadness in the poem. Love the rhymes you use. Its actually nice to have someone who can be with you in need.
7 years ago
by Black pearl
Again, this one is so different from your other poems.
Here the theme is love too, but it tells the other story --showing two aspects of love at d same time.
One that you are broken by someone and you cant have her but at the same time you got someone who makes you feel complete, but you cant love her.
Nice piece, bro.
I like the word usage. Did not expect it to have this kind of story by reading just the title. And how you focused on the other girl, rather than the heartbreaker. Also, LOVE how you described the get-me-by girl as prosaic. She's plain, not that great looking, probably.. from what I'm getting, at least.
7 years ago
This poem really touched my heart because I think oneglance of a women is all you need to get your heart ffluttering. I loved the feeling you bring here though. The first stanza tells the whole story though because you have a broken heart and it seems like through out the whole poem you are trying to move on from this person. That is just my opinion. I think anyone can seem alluring when you hurt all we want is someone to fix a hurt heart. 5/5
I absolutly loved it. We have all been there, and lived in the moment you speak. And some of us have been that get me by person. Truely a great poem, you are a talent writer. Reading more, keep it up!! 5/5