One thing I absolutely love about your poetry (other than it's amazing awesomeness) is your ability to include SO much imagery, so many places, people, things, thoughts, emotions, and it not feel overwhelming. Overstimulating, of course, but that to me is good. You pack a punch with your senses, and this is exactly what I mean.
Your ending blew me away. The whole poem had such longing and soft sadness, but that ending with aching for becoming old news I think is something we can all relate to -- we want to be important to people, and when they move on, even if we want them to, there is still a little sting there. If only you meant MORE maybe they wouldn't move forward yet. But then, do we want them to be stuck? Of course not. So much internal battling happening here.
I like the way you have penned this. With so many images of people and places which makes this read like a movie scene..and at the same time making the reader feel/share your pain.
Congrats on the win!
6 years ago
A beautiful, heartfelt poem that captures a readers interest by her relatable sadness, the Huntress has wowed her audience with imagery. She not only takes us on a poetry journey, but an actual one, with specific places, helping us bring the feel of the poem to life. I also really love the layout of this poem, the lengthy(er) lines and thick stanzas, not something we see all the time here on the site. The Huntress has a really amazing way of using everyday language in her poetry, but giving it a lining of sophistication... it's shown here in the second stanza for me, which held most of the promise and feeling for me in this poem. I have read this several times and find something new and heartfelt each time I read it. Wonderful write!