Comments : Spine shivers

  • 10 years ago

    by Everlasting

    Shoot, is it what I am thinking about?
    In the graveyard? disturbing the ones who have an eternal slumber?

    I thought the way you approached the scene was pretty good. It's vague though. The use of pale and wrinkles can be used as a hint. Though what I really thought about was someone who is trying to keep in touch with their love one. Trying to have one last conversation.

    What confused me was how you used, "you" through out the poem, but eventually you used her ghost will spot me amongst the trees.....

    Either or, someone went and took a corpse. Or someone is with someone else in the trees, and this someone hopes the ghost of whoever can see him/her with the other someone.

    hehe, I have no clue. But it was interesting.