Comments : Window On Infinity

  • 10 years ago

    by Poet on the Piano

    The first word that entered my mind after reading this was, gorgeous. My only suggestion, just my opinion though, would be to have punctuation. Be strategic with it or put it where it feels most natural. I like the ending where you had those lines separated, standing by themselves, but in the beginning it just reads as one long stanza.

    What I admire about this piece is how you use your words carefully and meaningfully. I notice you didn't have all of these fillers (which I always have to watch out for personally in my poetry). There are obviously some which add to the piece, but again, I feel you choose your words with care. The idea of kissing one's footprint is alluring and sentimental. It makes me think one is trying to bring a memory back, imagine that time when he/she walked upon the shore. There was also vulnerability here, forgetting one's name, the way home, yet realizing you are here because of this person. Whether it be a love or a spiritual reference?

    Shiva did ring a bell in my mind; I looked it up and Shiva is one of the most popular Hindu deities and primary gods. I remember in my world religions class we touched briefly on this. A very unique write, keep it up!