The only mistake I saw was loosing should be losing.

Otherwise I loved the message of this poem overall because of the emotion you feel here. You putit all out there on paper and your heart hurts. The tone is great and consistent throughout. The wording is great as well because it works well with what you were trying tossay. You lost this person in your life and it seems like you loved them a lot. It's really difficult but it will be okay because we all heal. Great write