Comments : Lifeless

  • 8 years ago

    by don

    Love the dark side to this, short but crptic

    don

  • 8 years ago

    by Dagmar Wilson

    Wow, this is one great write on the dark side

  • 8 years ago

    by Darren

    This describes my efforts at writing over the last few months.

    To me this reads as writers block,
    I love the layout and the way every word has impact.
    great piece from you

    nominated

    • 8 years ago

      by ah satan 666

      Thank you guys...

      I have tons in my head,
      Just doesn't want to come out yet :/

  • 8 years ago

    by Acoustic Odyssey

    Thank you, for conveying my thoughts exactly. It's like you get a million different ideas, but when it comes to bringing them to life there's a disconnect. So in short, well penned.

  • 8 years ago

    by Baby Rainbow

    This is a start??

    Then the next one will be better and more will come out.

    I can sense the frustration here, of wanting to express emotions but they do not come.

    However, you have made a really strong poem, well worded and creative, and I am sure many on here will relate to this, and be thinking " yep, that is me right now!"

    I know you will find the words when the time is right, and you will come back with a bang.

    Enjoyed this. xx

  • 8 years ago

    by Beautiful Soul

    This is a fantastic poem for the wording you used is spot on. I loved the story that enfolds. I hate when you keep trying to write over and over again but nothing ever comes out. I liked the line "caressing ink" it seems there like the ink is your only friend. The last line is powerful as well because it stands out. "Just numb". That tells me each time you tried to write you fell deeper into sadness and your heart and emotions became numb. Beautiful wording and poem. 5/5