Wow. I love the description you used here, the imagery of something flying and then landing inside our eyes! That was powerful, and sometimes it shows how fast we get thoughts and emotions, they just seem to appear.

I also like your word choice of pecks and bites, showing how this thing has no mercy.

And also like your word play on prey, and pray.

related to this, well done.

- Clasps, should just be clasp.

This is indeed a beauty which I do not want to ruin it with my comments! I like your choice of words and the picture you created..excellent!

Well written