Comments : Asylum

  • 9 years ago

    by Michael D Nalley

    Wow this would be a great promo for Thatcher C Nalley's book

    http://www.poems-and-quotes.com/your_messages.html

  • 9 years ago

    by Maple Tree

    The message here is very intense and I love how you express such honesty within and yet make it elegant... very powerful poem here!

  • 9 years ago

    by BlueJay

    I agree with Maple Tree here, but I do have one critique. It annoys me when people use short hand in poetry without real reason and your use of the "&" sign doesn't feel necessary... it actually feels lazy and takes away a little bit of the power and elegance that this piece has. It is still a fantastic write and it is wonderful, but you are diminishing its potential, it feels like.

  • 9 years ago

    by Baby Rainbow

    The disclosure of "home"
    Is that no matter which walls trap me
    I'm still insane

    ^^^ wow! Amazing lines!

    I think you done so well with this!

    I really like where you took the poem, and your wording talent is really great, something very strong! I adored the ending, how we all pretend and have this way of living and hiding things, denying things. The way you word your ending is brilliantly done.

    An impressive write, with a great outstanding title.

  • 9 years ago

    by Beautiful Soul

    Nominated.

  • 9 years ago

    by alka mendiratta

    5/5.Wonderful write.

  • 9 years ago

    by Beautiful Soul

    This poem hit me hard. What really defines a home? I guess it depends on the person you ask. The title is perfect for what you wrote the poem about. For some people a home can make you feel trapped within the four walls. With a dysfunctional family the walls seem to close in on you and there is nothing you can do about it. I agree with saffie, the third stanza is my favorite and it is very well written. You are saying there that no matter where you go within the house, you cannot escape and every room makes you feel claustrophobic. I liked the concept of the poem as a whole. It seems like you are saying that no matter what we are lying to ourselves in the fact that we are okay. Love this!

  • 9 years ago

    by Wicked Ways

    This sounds too familiar, unfortunately,,heh BUT i think this is a great poem, i'm all about words so ii can say this poem impacted me ... the title is simple tho , wish there was some dark adjective before or after "asylum" :p

    who really knows who's sane or insane

    awesome poem :)