Comments : A tale bigger than a little girl's hands

  • 5 years ago

    by nourayasmine

    Yay!

  • 5 years ago

    by nourayasmine

    Double post. Sorry.

  • 5 years ago

    by nourayasmine

    Obviously, I was so excited that you posted this again...

  • 5 years ago

    by Baby Rainbow

    Congratulations on your win, I really like what you did with this poem, and I love your title, what a really unique idea. It holds a really touching story and I like the ending when you then start to aim the poem back to your mother, and state that you are a little girl too. Nice way to end the poem.
    The use of the lizard throughout worked well, and again brought something quite unique to the poem, made it your own. The spin on the tale and tail also was impressive, and unique!

    The metaphors were really good, I especially liked the "sky closing" - great idea.

    just a little girl amid skyscrapers
    which never constructed ladders to the sun.

    - another amazing line that I could read again and again. That sun really out of reach, but sometimes feeling so close that it is teasing!

    It was nice to read.

    Congratulations on your win!
    Well done

  • 4 years ago

    by Baby Rainbow

    This poem is filled with such a touching story that it really reaches out to you from the very start of reading it, even the title which the author has picked, gives an indication that it might be a very moving write! I like the way the poem is narrated, towards the characters mother, this makes the poem very personal. It also leaves gates open for readers to connect to the poem personally too.
    The metaphors used are quite unique and gave such a big impact to each point that was being made within the stanzas. I find the relationship between mother and daughter a very special bond, and to write about it in this way really does show how strong and powerful it can be. A really excellent write.