This is such a sad poem. Sad why? Because it's true. Man is very selfish and uncaring when it comes to nature...if there's a profit to be gained. Whether clearing a forest by logging or just burning it out if they want the land then little thought is put into how old these trees etc are. I love how you have taken on the voice of the tree...sadly, I still think it will continue in the name of progression.
Nice comeback...loved it :)
5 years ago
by Beautiful Soul
Yayyy I am glad you wrote again as well. And agreed with hellon very sad, when it comes to the day when trees of forests have to be burned. I do like the story you used here as well. A lot of times this happens to a lot of kids. Where they just watch their family parish from the greed or stupidy of man or I guess humans in general. The view point is also great because it shows real fear to see your family die. The imagery is disturbing but true, because this seems to happen all the time in the animal kingdom. Like I said I loved the view point you used because the "narrator" seems to be all the different animals but all in one voice. Anyways great write. 5/5
Man abuses nature like kids eat
Sweets... its unnecessary!!!
man will only learn greed is deadly,
When money can't save them
From mother nature's wrath!!!
5 years ago
Actually I disagree. That man is very nice man , he is a good provider, he cooks your food, worms your house, runs the engine of life, exedra. I think you brother and sister must have done something to anger him like that.
This is a very strong piece! You truly convey the destruction of man towards wildlife in this tragic scene. Even though I read the title, I was still convinced that you were talking about people, and that made it all the terrifying to know that humans are the ones responsible for destroying an innocent "family" who only invited them into their home. You did an awesome job! Favorited :)
Hands down one of the TOP Nature poems on this site to date.
Just a well written and out of this world poetry piece by Poetess this week!
I was blown away... just beautiful.
She captures the message of wildfires, killing her family and tying in trees as family
Leaving me crying. I could smell the ashes and burning, rushing out of control.
Her word usage was amazing and the metaphors were so well done, just an amazing
You can even go deeper with this poem.. the loss of loved ones by natures hands.. I can't express how sorrowful, and elegance go hand in hand here. Powerful poem by Poetess !!
Only a child
as I watched them all perish
by the hands of one single being.
^^Honestly, as I read this all I could see is a lonely pained child in a midst of war as she sees her family die...a touching open to your poem.
The man with many faces.
For years I watched him
enter our home and
slowly cause destruction.
^^Here too again its reality isn't it. Whether humans or tree, we give room for a trusting person until one day when its too late...we find he is not so trusting!
I remember that infernal day.
The hair of my sisters became
tinged with burning fear,
and my brothers' strong arms
were weakened into frail,
^^Out of the whole poem this one really stood out for me for it portrays the cruelty of man as he leaves a devastating result behind. The images are so vivid here!
Petrified. Their feet rooted to the ground,
they could not run.
evaporated into furious, grey clouds.
^^Helpless that is how it was. That is how it is when in a war torn country a child stands helpless and devastated to see his/her family perish..a heart wrenching picture here.
This reality poem can and is applied not only to nature but also to humans. Man causes destruction to nature and its the same man causing destruction to other humans.
A well written poem which holds all the evils and emotions of life. Congrats on the win!
5 years ago
I really like nature poetry, I have ready many poems on this subject and genuinly, this is awesome! especially how you control the readers tempo by the way you layed out the piece. I love how you personalised this, to family, brothers & sisters, very provoking and emotional.
Really enjoyed it :)
5 years ago
I was crying as I read this piece, simply for the beauty and perfection of the write. It not only leaves an impact of the world and how delicate it really is but it leaves the reader contemplating many things as well. The way that this message was relayed to the audience is fantastic, there is an undeniable sense of emotion that shows up in this and a marvelous use of imagery helps make the point even more impacting.
This poem really touches on the sad truth of nature, and how many humans continue to treat it with such disrespect, and uncaring. I think the personification in this poem is truly outstanding, really making that tree so real, it could probably be read and taken as a humans view of a bad upbringing too. The title was so strong and really drew that poem to pinpoint such a disaster that happens more and more these days, and also to highlight the ending of the poem with the word "massacre" what a really powerful image to end on. A really fantastic poem, really creative blend of sadness, truth and nature.