Such a small simple write - I think thats your gift. Every writer can capture something a little different, some can make complex images and others can make you remember feelings youve long forgotten...
But your poetry is so simple and heart provoking. You dont see much of that, most of the time people try to write about these big feelings or stories. Yours are simple, sweet, cute, and capture life.
I hope i write more like you one day.
I suppose i should comment on the poem too not just a rant huh?
You are describing a hug obviously, I love how you did it though. Its cute, amazing. You dont see something as small as a hug described in such a way. the very first line probably explains why i love hugs more then kisses.. Hugs are so important to me and i never receive them currently. I love how you describe how it gets into you, shakin its hips! its just inside of you warming you up making you smile making you want to move and be something more and brightening, or even comforting the dimmest day.
I love how this was targeted to your child.
Your beautiful comments really made the day; I am really not the poet of the family, my daughter is, so it tickles me that you enjoy my attempts at holding the pen. I really use the poetry to see the world from my children's points of view and to connect with them in their world. I am now inspired to write so much more, you have inspired me to try again and I will post more soon.
And I can't wait to read yours as well
Love Mom/ Kitten
7 years ago
This is a sweet little write mom, definitely what we needed today, thank you for giving writing another shot.
As to the poem itself, I love the word choice and the rhythm that those words created. The love that you have for us definitely came through this piece well. I love how you formatted this with short lines that flowed well and periods to stop the thought and give a small pause. Great job.
Kitten, on a personal note: I admire Adreamer's poetry, she is very talented, you should be very proud of her <3
You too have a gift and I thank you for sharing with us :-)
My Mother-in-Law had a poetry page on here for the last two years of her life. She always used to say on here, My Daughter in Law Maple is the poet, I'm just on here to read and express my thoughts... I always used to say to her... Momma P. You have a beautiful heart and Soul, it needs to be shared, in your way and your style, don't cut yourself short.. Miss her so very much.
Enough of my babble, its just really nice to meet you today and read your poetry and again you have made me smile!
Firstly, I adore the title of your poem. It is a lovely title and feels quite comforting before you even read the poem.
I like the shortness of the poem, and your word choice of " getting in your soul to dance" that idea was unique and beautiful.
Your poem is touching, and one of those things I think should be entered onto a greetings card.
7 years ago
This is a short piece that captures the heart of everyone that reads it. It is simple and truly in the spirit of being a mother. The way she described a hug so purely and so detailed in a beautiful use of words is wonderful. There is an image of this moment of how pure and stunning a hug can be and just how much something so simple can mean to someone you love. The style of this piece is unique and phenomenally done. it leaves an impact that most pieces are not able to. There is a sense of self in this piece, despite being dedicated to her children, that really shines and adds personality to this and makes it that much more of a delight to read.